with the guy below. Yeah, you need to make it longer. It's much too short.
The idea for a 'magical pen' isn't the most original - it's been done before, many times. You also need to work on your physics - the breaking wall, the water filling up the hole, then falling down... etc.
But it was still quite good - keep it up.
Pros: Good idea. I started laughing after the second ad, and the ending was pretty neat. I think you used the idea pretty well. The movement of the characters was also realistic a lot of the time.
Cons: Some of the animation needs work, like when the guys rubs his chin or the lady first comes up the stairs. In fact, the animation seems to get better as we progress through the movie.
The sound effects weren't the best, but that wasn't much of a problem.
Overall: 9/10 for pros and 7/10 for cons. Average = 8/10. Keep the animating up.
Well thanks for the comment, and also pointing out the pros to the animation. I knew the chin rub and the stairs were not the best, but i also ran out of time and couldn't do a 3rd run through on those parts.
Thanks for laughing at the jokes, it is kinda funny that you started laughing at the same point that most other people did that, I showed this to, before I submitted it.
There are a lot of sprite animations out there - and a lot of them aren't very good. However, this is one the best I've seen so far - I think it's got a good feel for movement and it's mostly smoothly done.
I just wish all the others were more like this.
Good job and keep it up.
Thanks a lot! glad you like it
Pros: Art isn't too bad, most animation pretty well done
Cons: First of all, lip syncing was out and not heaps well done (but I shouldn't go on about it because I've never tried it in my life). The real problem with this, is that i can't really seem to get what's going on. Mostly it is because of the hard-to-understand voice acting.
Overall: Not too bad, really. Keep working on the animation.
Pros: Good lip syncing, nicely edited (kind of)
Cons: There are a quite a few, but I'll stick with the most obvious ones. It's too short, hard to understand, and doesn't really have a plot. That's really the main reason it isn't so good. Sure, there isn't heaps of animation, but that doesn't really matter. And the art wasn't so bad, either. But these don't help the fact that it doesn't make any sense.
Overall: That pretty much sums it up.
I can't believe I caught this while STILL UNDER JUDGEMENT! I'm the 131st person to view this! Woot!
Anyways, awesome vid! I love this series, can't wait for the next one to be out!
There's so many minecraft parodies, but this one is the best. Laughed my head off.
How could you.
Still, you got me there. 1 star for that.
Most of the animation was very well done, and it made me laugh. Good job, and keep itup.
The animation was well-done, the idea was awesome. I loved it. Actually, I'm going to re-watch right now!
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